利用环境描写增加续写细节

读后续写评分要求中有一项为“内容丰富”，并对学生的语法结构及词汇丰富性做出了要求。而环境描写可以有效增加细节，丰富内容，若能灵活运用，可以有效提高续写能力。本文将以一篇“火场逃生”续写介绍如何进行环境描写。

续写原文（选自湖北高二联考）

The event that stands out in Tom’s memory happened one morning when Tom was only ten years old. He was at home with his elder sister Jane. Tom was doing his homework when he heard raised voices. At first， he thought nothing of it since customers in the motorcycle shop directly below their flat often became loud， but he soon realized this time it was different.

“Quick！ Quick！ Remove the motorcycles from the shop.” someone yelled.

Then a thick burning smell filled the air. When Tom opened the front door of their flat to investigate， a thick cloud of smoke greeted him. The motorcycle shop had caught fire and people were running and crying.

Jane， who had been playing the violin in her room， hurried to the living room. They rushed out of the door and along the corridor （走廊） through the smoke.

They were heading towards the stairway at the far end of the corridor when Jane stopped in her track. She turned around and headed back the way they came. Tom had no idea what she was doing， but he followed suit （照着做）.

Jane had suddenly remembered the lady in her 70s who lived next door to them， who they called Makcik， Malay （马来西亚语） for auntie. Jane began banging on Makcik’s door， but got no answer. As the smoke thickened around them， Tom could see many of their neighbors—some still in their pyjamas—running for safety. The thought of fear crossed his mind.

“She would have run for safety like everyone else！” Tom cried. However， Jane refused to give up. “I knowMakcik’s still inside.” She said she was familiar with Makcik’s daily routine and was certain she would still be sleeping. She pounded the door. “Go downstairs. Go now！ Go！” Tom urged.

Paragraph1： Tom noticed the flame was reaching up.____________

Paragraph 2： Luckily， some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help.____________

一、借体感写环境

本文续写首段提示句“noticed the flame was reaching up”从视觉角度表明火势蔓延，突出危机感。（剩余4737字）